Friday, October 26, 2018

17A- Elevator Pitch #2



I believe the feedback I got back was very helpful and that I need to be more fluent when it comes to talking about my idea. I believe I did a little better this time but still believe towards the end I can continue to work on my fluency. The feedback told me that the idea was great and so was my hook. I did change my hook a little bit which I believe enhanced it even more. Between upgrading my hook and being more fluent, I believe I changed my elevator pitch for the better.

2 comments:

  1. Hey Anthony,

    I thought that your delivery was very clear and concise during the pitch. I also think the hook was very interesting at the beginning. Additionally, you did a good job at targeting UF students which is essential since they will be your main target group. I also think the feedback I received from my first pitch helped make my second pitch a lot better as well.

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  2. I think this is a great pitch! You were really well-spoken and clear, made a lot of excellent points, had a great hook, and showed a lot of emotion that really came through to the viewer. I think you did a great job of listening to the feedback you got on your last pitch and using it to get better and it showed.

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